fredbassett

Yes, I think a bit of revision is needed to clarify the time lines, and add a bit of background info. I'm having trouble bringing in the background without festooning the story with too many Dallas-style "discuss the plot over breakfast" moments. And writing caving stuff for a non-caving audience is tricky as I hate too-obvious "explain it all" plot devices. It tends to disrupt attempts at atmosphere build up. But if I'm hopelessly obscure, you'll all need to tell me and I'll revise. I also suspect I might do something ghastly and add a few "author's notes" when this one is finally finished. Just to record where imagination parts company with reality.

And I do love moments where everyone avoids everyone else! But I worried about this scene with Cutter and how he would/should react. Glad you felt it worked.