Drabble, In The Dark Of The Night, Jenny, 15

[fredbassett]

Title : In The Dark Of The Night
Author : fredbassett
Fandom : Primeval
Rating : 15
Characters : Jenny
Disclaimer : Not mine no money made, don’t sue.
Spoilers : Minor for 2.07
Summary : Written for missyvortexdv for the primeval_denial  challenge:drabble, prompt Jenny + shooting

There were times when Jenny wondered if she’d ever forget his face.

There were times when she hoped she never would.

She’d not wanted to know his name. Nor had she wanted to know if he’d left behind a woman to mourn him, or children who still cried for their father.

She’d acted on instinct, bringing up the rifle and firing. She’d done it to save herself.

And the others.

She reminded herself of that when the memories became too much.

There were even times when she felt it excused what she’d done.

But now wasn’t one of those times.

Comments

[rodlox.livejournal.com]

Cutter, go hug Jenny, make her feel better.

I'll stand over here and congratulate fredbassett for a very evoking drabble.

[fredbassett]

Thanks. I just don't see Jenny taking something like that lightly.

[telperion-15.livejournal.com]

I was thinking about this the other day, when the ep was on. She didn't really seem that bothered by what she'd done at the time - and shooting a person is a little different to shooting clay pigeons!

Lovely drabble.

[fredbassett]

At the time they were trying to stay alive, but later? Yes, I think she'd feel it then. As you say, it's not the same as shooting at inanimate objects.

[lukadreaming.livejournal.com]

Excellent! Very powerful.

[fredbassett]

Thanks :)

[lsellersfic.livejournal.com]

Agreeing with the other commenters - a nice piece of gap filling.

[fredbassett]

Thanks. That scene seemed to cry out for it.

[joereaves.livejournal.com]

Very nice. A missing scene that was needed.

[fredbassett]

Thanks. I have a hatred of the "killing without consequences" mentality. I can certainly see her doing it, and also the quick come-back line about clay pigeons, but I felt the scene needed a coda. Interestingly (to me, anyway!), that's the first time I've ever done that.

[reggietate.livejournal.com]

*huggles Jenny* Yes, it would hit her later. She's not nearly as hard-nosed as she pretends to be.

[fredbassett]

Agreed.

[mysteriousaliwz.livejournal.com]

*hugs Jenny*

I can see it affecting her like that, afterwards.

[fredbassett]

*joins in the hug*

[thefakebook.livejournal.com]

Oh Jenny... *hugs her*

That's some powerful writing and a very sobering thought.

[fredbassett]

Thanks. Yes, it is.

[fififolle]

Wow. Brilliant. That really struck me when I watched the ep the other day. It was like OMG she killed a man!! She did a good job of a briefly shocked person, then she did the line about pony club and clay pigeon shooting.
This was terrific. Really captures her strength but human vulnerability in equal measure, very Jenny.
Wow! Think she'd want a hug? *g*

[fredbassett]

Thanks. I hope I'm gradually finding my feet with Jenny. I do like her as a character, even though I still miss Claudia.

[arianedevere.livejournal.com]

Wow. Brilliant. And all in a hundred words. Amazing!

[fredbassett]

Thanks. Funnily enough, this one hit 100 straight off on the first draft, and when I tittled around with it, I ended up making just 4 small changes. I've never ever managed a drabble quite so quickly, so I'm really pleased it worked.

[missyvortexdv.livejournal.com]

Poor gal. Next time I should go for happy inducing prompt, she gets too much angst really. I am curious, what he was oing that meant need for shooting? Acting dumb I presume but still wish I knew.

[fredbassett]

I think it was the simple fact that he was holding a gun and they were trying to escape. No time to ask questions, I suppose.

[missyvortexdv.livejournal.com]

Ah, I'd missed the bit that said it related to 2.07 - now I get it! :)

[deinonychus-1.livejournal.com]

That was good. I always thought that whole bit in the episode was treated a bit too lightly - this isn't a creature, it was a man that she shot. Even in self defense that has to have consequences.

[fredbassett]

That's the problem with the constraints of the show. Things that seem important to fanficcers just get glossed over. Still, leaves plenty of scope for us.

[cordeliadelayne]

Aw, poor Jenny.

[fredbassett]

*hugs Jenny*

[rospberry.livejournal.com]

I love when the reality of emotions/consequences is tackled in fanfic - that's one of the joys of it. Fantastic job.

[fredbassett]

Thanks, hon.

[daxie42.livejournal.com]

Poor conflicted Jenny - nice drabble!

[fredbassett]

Thanks :)

[knitekat.livejournal.com]

Awwww.. hugs poor Jenny.. you didn't have a choice!

[fredbassett]

No, not much choice at all.

[a1cmustangpilot.livejournal.com]

Wow that is really deep right there! In such a short space you have managed to show both emotions that run parallel in situations like this! I really feel for Jenny in this. It's hard knowing that despite saving yourself as well as those you are protecting you have also killed someone else who used to be someone's child. Great job with this and thank you so much for directing me to this!
~

[fredbassett]

Thanks. I like the challenge of conveying emotion in so few words. When it works I get a real sense of achievement.

[neferitiel.livejournal.com]

Poor Jenny! *kicks Nick into her room then locks the door firmly*

[fredbassett]

I think she'd be glad of someone just then.